The Secret to a Memorable College Essay: A Great Hook

With another year of?record-breaking application volume?in the rearview, it’s crucial for rising seniors to create strong college essays that set themselves apart. What’s one key way to grab your reader’s attention? A compelling first line! A well-crafted, memorable hook can captivate your reader and leave a lasting impression. At the same time, a cliché, inappropriate, or dull opening can make it more difficult to hold your reader’s attention and get them to root for you.

Here are three ways a good hook can elevate the essay that follows and some examples of creative, effective college essay hooks:

THE PURPOSE OF A GOOD HOOK (AND EXAMPLES OF WHAT WORKS)

Generate Interest and Engagement

Your goal in your first line is to engage the reader, encouraging them to continue reading your essay with enthusiasm. You can create an emotional connection or spark curiosity, making the reader eager to discover more about your experiences, perspectives, and aspirations. A strong hook sets the stage for an essay that keeps the reader engaged and invested throughout.

• Example 1:?I am my own favorite fictional character?and have been since?age five.?
• Example 2:?Every October, the dry winds arrive, the sky clears, and at?night the hills above my house cut a black profile against the?stars.?
• Example 3:?Lapis lazuli. The words rolled off my tongue. I envisioned magic spells, flashes of color; whatever lapis lazuli was, I knew it was something special.

Set the Tone and Direction

A well-crafted hook not only grabs attention but also sets the tone and direction for your entire essay. It establishes the context, theme, or central idea that will be explored further in your writing. The hook serves as a guidepost, leading the reader through your essay and providing a roadmap for what lies ahead. It should seamlessly transition into the main body of your essay, ensuring a coherent and cohesive narrative.

• Example 1:?Wading in the murky Dead Man’s River in thigh-high rubber?boots, I bent down to scoop up a green water sample.
• Example 2:?I was mesmerized by spotlights, shields, and bulky helmets with internal fans. Led by a robotic arm named Sonny, I watched the lead surgeon ream a native hip socket as part of the preparation of a patient’s hip for an implant.?

Make a Memorable First Impression

Admissions officers sift through piles of essays, searching for the one that stands out from the rest. Make it easy for them to advocate for you by showing them right away your enthusiasm.

• Example 1:?All I remember is the hum of a Rent soundtrack when the car slammed into us. I heard my mother’s scream before I heard the screech of the tires. Over the next several months, I had a slew of MRIs, nerve tests and CT scans on my brain, spine and arms.?
• Example 2:?I wrote my first poem when I was five years old, and it wasn’t about flowers, it was about disease. The piece was an amalgamation of third grade cultural influences, featuring an adaptation of an English nursery rhyme, and a lamentation of recent school-wide PSAs that chicken pox had become a credible threat.?
• Example 3:?A hypnotic collection of black polka dots shrinks into the swollen folds of a giant, dandelion yellow pumpkin. Yayoi Kusama’s original Kabochas mesmerize art enthusiasts; the 1,000-piece image scattered across my coffee table is just as captivating.
• Example 4: “Xiōngmáo.”?My first word in Chinese was “hairy chest.”

COLLEGE ESSAY HOOK: WHAT?NOT?TO DO

Alienate an admissions officer by showing your privilege or appearing out of touch with reality.

• Example:?I had no idea how poor people in Africa were until?I?saw them?when I went on safari in Kenya?at age five.?

Overwrite your prose (don’t rely on a thesaurus).

• Example:?College holds vast potentialities for the optimization of my?intellect and ability to succeed in the personal financial arena.?

Make yourself look bad by drawing attention to your lack of organization, procrastination, or other unflattering behaviors.

• Example:?I was up late last night trying to figure out what to write for?my college essay when the idea finally hit me!?

Oversell your interests to the point that you seem inauthentic (as a general rule, avoid the word “passion”).

• Example:?Like Proust and his Madeline, I remember the day I found my passion for molecular biology.

Rely on cliché themes (like athletic victories).

• Example:?I didn’t think I’d ever make the squash team.

For guidance crafting a stand out hook, we encourage you to work with someone who has experience with the college application process.?We’re here to help.

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