How can you revise your writing to show more effectively?

I do sometimes read aloud to proofread; however, I have not always and paid a bit of a price for it--sending in, for example, a pronoun he when it sought to have been she and I didn't catch it....fortunately, a cool editor and a fast fix...not always the case. Hopefully, it doesn't damage future work invitations

One thing I've found helpful is to have someone read with me. If the dialogue doesn't flow naturally as written, this is the time to make adjustments.

Además, al leer en voz alta se necesita, por lo general, dedicar más atención y calma al proceso, lo que hará que nos fijemos mejor en lo que hemos escrito y detectemos peque?os errores, repeticiones...

I find it helpful to walk away once I have finished. The next day, I open it and run it through Grammarly to compare its version with mine. Sometimes, I use the Grammarly version; sometimes, I don't.

Who is your main audience? Knowing who you are writing for key to communicating clearly. For instance, are your readers experts in your topic or unfamiliar with it? The answer will influence your approach. Sometimes you can be so close to your subject that you presume knowledge your readers may not have. You may need to “fill in the blanks” for readers. In contrast, if your readers are acquainted with your subject, try a fresh approach, to keep your writing interesting and your readers engaged.

Experience during work as a foreign correspondent taught me that the most important thing is to be concise. A short and precise sentence is the key in business communication where it is necessary to convey information and be sure that the other party will understand it correctly.

En efecto, escribir de forma clara, concisa, sin demasiados circunloquios (pero sin por ello tener que usar un lenguaje que incomode al lector) no solo hará que el texto se comprenda mejor, sino que la imagen que el lector se pueda creer de quien envía el texto sea el de una persona clara, sin dobleces.

La voz activa confiere eso: actividad. El verbo ofrece una actividad a realizar, proponer en pasiva o sustantivizando el verbo le resta fuerza al mensaje que deja de tener el dinamismo que aportan los verbos en forma activa.

I really appreciate the points this paragraph made, especially regarding active voice as the best way to convey confidence one’s work. Active voice is great for communicating as an authority, an expert in a given subject. In contrast, passive voice seems less authoritative and less sure.

From my experience, I found this idea unhelpful. Listen to other opinions, but stay true to yourself. It's always the right way.

Que otra persona pueda leer tu escrito, te dará una primera idea de si es o no es claro y comprensible lo que has escrito. Puede que pienses que estás diciendo algo, pero que no haya quedado totalmente claro en lo que has escrito. No se trata de que esa persona te diga que cambies cosas porque sí, sino de que te diga lo que ha entendido para ver si coincide con tu intención. Al margen de que pueda encontrar errores que se te hayan podido pasar.

Escribir un guion inicial con la estructura que quieres seguir, es decir, organizar tus ideas y la forma de contarlas es básico para contar todo lo que se quiere contar y de la forma más clara y fiel a tu propósito.

When you revise your writing to show more effectively, focus on concrete details and actions. Describe what the characters see, hear, and do. Use strong, specific verbs and keep descriptions short and vivid. Avoid abstract terms and unnecessary adjectives. Let the dialogue reveal emotions and thoughts. Here's an example: Before: John felt very angry when he saw the messy room. He thought about how he had told his kids to clean up, but they never listened. He was frustrated and upset. After: John stood at the door, fists clenched. Toys and clothes covered the floor. "I told you to clean up," he said, voice tight. His kids stared at the TV, ignoring him.

Working as an editor, I came across many mistakes: completely logically mixed chapters, insufficiently developed characters, thrown facts without any context, but in my opinion, what really matters and what cannot be compensated later is the emotional involvement of the writer. You cannot hide behind your words. You must reveal yourself, express your filings, thoughts, and ideas, free yourself. Just than the written words can get their real meaning - readers will truly feel that they are not alone.